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Ever wake up in the middle of the night and wonder why,
And then realize you can’t sleep again?
Ever wish that you had never wakened up that morning,
And then pray you don’t tomorrow?
Ever dream of a life that means something to you,
And want it to come true so bad, it hurts?
Ever want to scream for help and not be able to,
And tell yourself it‘s for the better?
Ever need people to care,
And then won’t let them in because they would let you down anyway?
Ever need someone to hold up the world for you,
And yet you have to save yourself?
Ever watch the world move around you,
And wish you could jump in,
but are to scared to?
Ever know what's right, what’s true,
And then end up doing it wrong anyway?
Ever wonder is being smart is dangerous,
And then realize that you’d rather not know anything?
Ever felt like nothing,
And then know that you are?
Ever feel so mixed up that you wish you could wipe your mind clean,
But when you realize can’t,
you go nuts trying anyway?
Ever think about the world so hard that you want to cry,
But then you bottle it up inside?
Ever ask questions to your ceiling,
And wish it could answer back?


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The following comments are for "Have you ever?"
by kimmysings17

Waking up!
All the time, I scream and shout, soundlessly, at my ceiling. It waits for me to stop shouting and begging, to stop asking it for help. It's patient. It taught me a lot, actually, by not saying anything. Sometimes, the best teachers are the most silent. As for the world, well, it sets my head spinning on a regular basis. That's the fun part. I'd suggest that "wakened up" be changed to "arose" or something, it's less harsh and flows more smoothly; although the question / answer format is slightly awkward (intrinsicly), it's well written & asks good questions. Keep it up! .ak!plt.

( Posted by: ak7raplt [Member] On: May 2, 2002 )

to kimmysings17
My extreme sympathies and appreciation. "but are to scared to?" should be too instead. I think for this poem, maybe it would be more interesting if you could somehow bring it back to one point and make it circular of thoughts so it doesn't end in such a slightly broken manner though it would be so sad to lose that last line. Good job just in case I haven't said it yet.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 3, 2002 )

last line
What can I say? I can relate to this piece rather easily and I especially "dug" the last line. I'm ususally not all that fond of long poems, but you made this one work. I guess I'm from the "less is more" school of thought, but I am nonetheless impressed. Keep up the good work.

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: May 3, 2002 )

wooooooo
hey! okay, so i'm biased, but i think it deserved a 10! i'm here for you! you're at my house right now, in the kitchen, sorting buttons. rah! i hafta go to work in a few, so aloha, hoaloha. ¡xoxo! *josie

( Posted by: kailani24 [Member] On: May 5, 2002 )





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