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Tinkerbelle’s Lament to Wendy (He Loves You)

Oh, do not take your heart to flowers
Such fickle oracles sway by the hour
Unstemmed from knowing’s staying power
He loves you

He never said it in protest
Yet more than once did he confess
A truth I surely would have guessed
He loves you

The heart has reasons to suppress
Realizations which lead through lonesome unrest
Yet bidden or no, I must say yes
He loves you

Tender as flickering, amber glow
Puddling memories, warm, in familiar home
His desire is there if his shadow has roamed
He loves you

No plucking can change my final stipend
This playful fairy was just a friend
At the very edge of boyhood’s end
He loves you

In want of absolution, I’ll drift away
Yet of hearts bereft, let just mine pay
For through it all and so always
He loves you


------
"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"


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The following comments are for "Tinkerbelle's Lament to Wendy (He Loves You)"
by hazelfaern

Tink and Wendy
WoW! This is more than just giving an end to a long-time quarrel of two girls in fairy tale history. J.M. Barrie's love triangle story was so subtle in 'Peter Pan', but here you gave it a new color and it's admirable. Tinkerbelle's lament is bittersweet and almost incredible (I have all the time hated her, I didn't clap my hands when she got poisoned!)

I know you wrote this not only as an added scene in 'Peter Pan', but you also retold an old issue of love triangle in such an endearing way. I am also sure you had so much fun writing this, despite its sad theme.

I enjoyed this very very much!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

hazelfaern
You have a very beautiful mind, I loved reading this piece, it is very original.

This would be great inscribed on a bronze plaque, by the statue of Peter Pan near the Royal Albert Hall in Kensington, London.

When is your book coming out?

Alex xx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

Awestruck
This is absolutely amazing!! Honestly, I do not have any type of criticism. Great work.

Typically I'm not a huge fan of repeating lines, but I ADORE how it worked here. Excellent work.

( Posted by: EverybodyElsesGirl [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

Remarkable
Absolutely dazzling little poem. You've taken one of my favourite stories ever and added something to it, something that really clicks with the original story. This is beautiful and I loved it beyond words (though I tried using words anyway)!

The best thing to happen to Peter Pan since last year's movie (which was also glorious).

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

Beautiful - He Loves You
This is lovely. The poem has the timeless magical quality of the original, and by right fits in to any triangle.

You should be a proud mama!

Lans

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

Peter Pan
Right, I'm only a little obsessed with all things relating to Peter Pan (favorite book, movie and musical). Unfortunately Peter does not end up with Wendy in the book, but he does start a new adventure with her granddaughter, Jane. This poem is fabulous though, a litte in depth for a pixie, who can only feel one emotion at a time, my guess would be remorse. Anyway, great write on one of my favorite subjects!

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

Tinkerbelle's
Beautiful... simply beautiful.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

Rock on
Wow! I really liked this poem.The Peter Pan story is very unfamiliar to me. I was actually first acquanted with it as a teenager and then still did not understand the concept in its entirety. embarassedI would never have looked that into it and am therefore grateful.Elias

( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

A poem for Tink
I am coming back to this because this is my favorite. Now I realize it has become like a write-off entry: only this time everyone voted only 10s.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: December 15, 2004 )





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