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The sun greeted us
But forlornly went away
The clouds disappeared
Though they returned to stay

Dark was the day
And cold was the air
When the birds flew away
And left us there

The cold wind was new
a tree is whipped unmercifully
away the trash flew
to fly tirelessly

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by hbaybb

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That is really depressing.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )

let me just say this
Unmercifully is too long a word.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: May 2, 2002 )

That's all that needs to be said, very good.

( Posted by: Demonic Baboon [Member] On: May 2, 2002 )

Depressing, isn't it?
This is depressing, but it's also a very well written piece, so I guess both go hand in hand. It's very good, I mean it, it is.

( Posted by: TrojanTony [Member] On: May 2, 2002 )

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