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"A Short Drop and a Sudden Stop"

This is the end
I feel so dead
I don't want to feel
Like this anymore
Ooh, so down

I don't want
To go home tonight
I just want to stay out
This is the best diversion
Just us guys out on the town

Maybe I will run
Far away from here
Find some place
With no one like you
No one to fall in love with

Falling in love is like
Boarding a ship
When you know
The ship is doomed
For the bottom of the ocean

It may seem like a pleasure cruise
Until you're going down
And there are no life jackets to be found
Now it's time to panic
Now it's time to get angry
Now it's time for fighting

You won't float until you're gone

------
jimmy g--do you see my heart? it is lying on the floor.


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The following comments are for "A Short Drop and a Sudden Stop"
by JimmyAndHisRocket

this is the best diversion
well done, I must say.

( Posted by: forlackofabettername [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

this is the end
hmm some real strong words placed in there....sometimes i think i can realate to what you are trying to say...good job

( Posted by: XzX [Member] On: November 15, 2004 )

-insert title here
in your one verse"
Falling in love is like
Boarding a ship
When you know
The ship is doomed
For the bottom of the ocean"

its seem like u have had some troubled relationships. What about couples that have been married for 50 years and are still happy? o well. its a good depressing song...i actually read the whole thing!!!

( Posted by: VinceClarke241 [Member] On: November 15, 2004 )

which is the illusion?
when IN a relationship I look on my love-hating self as bitter. when just OUT of a relationship I look at my pro-love self as naive.

"Falling in love is like
Boarding a ship
When you know
The ship is doomed
For the bottom of the ocean"
-- Been there, done that. it doesn't always have to be like that. but all too often it can be.

Yet another great write from Jimmy :-). Keep it up.

Jonathan.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: November 15, 2004 )

L-L-Love...re: jonnyt, vinceclark241, XzX, forlackofabettername
Hey guys, thanks for the welcomed comments.

forlackofabettername- you were kind as always. i am glad to write another piece that you have enjoyed.

XzX- again, its good to get a comment from you and i am glad to have written something that someone can relate to.

VinceClarke241- you are right, i have had some troubled relationships but that is bound to happen in the search for "the one"...not that i have been looking. anyway, my parents have been married for about 30 happy years so i know that love can be good. i've even written about the positive sides of love in some of my songs. i was just looking at some old scars when i wrote this song...and some not so old scars. i love to love and i know it is a good thing...don't get me wrong. i just write to clear my chest...you know? anyway, i'm glad that you liked it.

JonnyT- its always good to get a compliment from someone that i look up to as much as i do you. i have always enjoyed your writings ever since i read "october lament". i am glad that you enjoy my work and i am glad that you know what i am talking about.

again, thank you all.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 15, 2004 )

Love the Title
It made me grin. The song was delightfully pessimistic. Something I would listen to on repeat during one of my cynical moods.

Good write.

Amy

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: November 16, 2004 )

frenchay...
glad you like. aahhhh...cynical moods. those are great.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 16, 2004 )

Music
Good lyrics. What kind of music does it go with?

( Posted by: thinspiration [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

to: thinspiration re: music
the music for this is a slow acoustic picking line until the last 7 lines it picks up for the wonderful climax...only dead people float. i write all my songs on my ibanez acoustic and they all have mostly rock undertones. when i play this one it reminds me most of "butterfly" by weezer. i don't know if you've heard it but you should check it out because it is a great acoustic song. any way i style myself after bands such as brand new, dashboard confessional, and of course, weezer. so, thanks for reading thinspiration. i am honored. i'm glad you liked it.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )

float?
you won't float until you're gone?! That's so sad! this is a sad piece, i like it.
Now it's time to panic
Now it's time to get angry
Now it's time for fighting
my favorite.

( Posted by: supergranny [Member] On: November 17, 2004 )





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