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Odd creatures roam the night,
None stranger than the bird that just took flight.

High plumage of pearly white,
Wings lifted by zephyrs’ might.

Great with contemptuous eyes,
Tearing within its talons fleshy ties.

Dripping blood,
Someone’s brood.

Yet no piercing shriek hit the air,
Disturbing sleepers in their lair.

For this solitary bird is long necked soul,
Taking leave of this world fell and foul.


------
The conscious shape reality.


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The following comments are for "A Sight in the Night"
by Furius

re: a sight in the night
Sucks to be low on the food chain, eh? I found the lines ending in blood/brood and soul/foul to not ryhme as easily as the the rest of the lines in your poem, however a friend of mine says I am just being too harsh with the english language and that he thinks they are fine. I was never much for rhyming anyway, so forget this paragraph even happened :-0 Anyway, great images. I grew up on a mountain with nary a neighbor living beside us, and I can say that there are truly strange sights to be had in the night.

( Posted by: Zebralicious [Member] On: April 30, 2002 )

nice poem
I thought it was a pretty interesting poem. It's true that lines don't have to ryhme exactly. They can be close. There's a term for that but I forget what it is. I liked the description of the talons carrying fleshy ties. I didn't get the last line. I hope it has some good meaning; that would really add to the poem. Also, I didn't get the allusion to zephyr. I don't know what zephyr is. Oh, my dad just told me. A zephyr is a gentle breeze, he said.

( Posted by: Seanspacey [Member] On: April 30, 2002 )

but for...
but for the reference to a long neck, the image strongest in my mind was a snowy white owl... and it does seem to be creature born into and of the night more so than most... certainly the mythology and folk lore surrounding them echoes within your poem. Well written... also querying the last line... doesn't seem to fit (mainly in my opinion because of the long necked reference)... Ju =*_*=

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: May 2, 2002 )





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