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Oh caterwauling popinjay
You gadabout, you pressure spout
From your steamy eyes I see
Youíre bursting with some mad about

Donít shout Ė the world
Just goes deafer when you do
And blinder with eyes glazed
No matter if your words are true

Mind your frequent exclamations
In excess, overwhelm like pepper
So be wiser with your seasoning
Artful coyness suits you better

The world at large is brash and crude
And louder than you, silly pisser
If you want attention donít be rude
Try something shocking Ė slyly whisper



------
"All the darkness in the world
cannot put out the light
of one candle"


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The following comments are for "A Wry Tsk! to Mad Shouters"
by hazelfaern

Whisper don't Shout
Jennifer,

Lucie has said it all, but I had to comment, this a a great piece, either read literally, or as a profound and extremely good piece of advice.

'Donít shout Ė the world
Just goes deafer when you do
And blinder with eyes glazed
No matter if your words are true
-slyly whisper'

How true!


Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )

Blushing and Laughing
Lucie, being told that this poem is fit for graffiti in the poet's restroom in Heaven is suddenly my favorite compliment. You've made me blush and laugh -- thank you.

Who says a brain divided cannot stand?

And thank you, Ivor, for your kind words, too.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )

Sweet
What a nifty poem, and half the time I have no idea what you're talking about. Who cares? It's my Jabberwocky of the week! Yet, it has a message. A message to whom? I like to think it's that freak I see on the bus sometimes.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )

An Other Style
I'm glad you liked the poem, Jess. As for the style, I think it's something I fall into when I either haven't been writing for a while or I've been reading too much Emily Dickinson. In this case, I simply haven't been writing as much lately.

I'm glad you stopped by too -- I've missed your apt critical eye. More of your comments are always welcome.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

Right on
Yes to get heard speak softly. Welcome back have missed your works.

( Posted by: chapter1 [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

Emily Morrison
I think it was written by Emily Dickinson after she finally got married, to Jim Morrison. That's how the hinted social commentaries and nature intertwine in this work. It is Emily - the two dashes, happier and a bit naughty.

Regardz
Telefun





( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

appreciative pleasantries
Viper 9 -- What a lark; Jabberwocky is one of my favorites... ah, the gloaming.

Chapter1 -- Your words are a rare treat.

Teflon -- I got a chuckle out of the notion of Emily Dickinson married to Jim Morrison, happier and a wee bit naughty. What a delightful compliment.

Claire -- I've missed a lot at Lit over the past few months and catching up on your submissions is something I plan on doing soon. I'm glad you liked the poem.

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )





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