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"To the Merciful Ones"

Heís falling down
Oh to drown
Inside a bottle
Like father like son
Here goes another one
Thanks, dad, for the model
She broke his heart
Now heís hurt
He really wants to hate her
He hangs his head
Wishes he dead
He was so in to her

I hate it when they say
All is fair in love in war
When I see these kids
So marked up with scars
Lovers can be so brutal
But thank God
For the merciful ones

Sheís falling down
As she sees him drown
Inside a bottle
She didnít want to hurt him
She still loves him
She really feels awful
She reaches out her hand
To bring him back to dry land
But now heís fading away
She hangs her head
She cries his dread
But she knows that she canít stay

I hate it when they say
All is fair in love in war
When I see these kids
So marked up with scars
Lovers can be so brutal
But thank God
For the merciful ones

But girl
Thereís only so much you can do
He has got to want a hand from you
Just let him know that you are there
Just let him know that you care
Thereís only so much you can do

I hate it when they say
All is fair in love in war
When I see these kids
So marked up with scars
Lovers can be so brutal
But thank God
For the merciful ones


------
jimmy g--do you see my heart? it is lying on the floor.


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The following comments are for "To the Merciful Ones"
by JimmyAndHisRocket

dedicated
i wrote this song for my friend leanne. she open up to me on her feelings about her ex-boyfriend. thanks for the inspiration leanne.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )

I love you jamie
you're awesome thank you soo much... that means a lot
-Leanne

( Posted by: Leabee13 [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )

love and war are equally fair
both are human, both leave you better off dead.

nice song. I enjoyed.

Jonathan.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )

Very good
Good lyrics. You walked a narrow ridge here -- a rock song (so it seems) about a topic that is utterly plagued by cliche. Almost every song in this vein is simply dreadful. But you manage to pull it off with virtually no ctinge factor, so bravo! It actually seems real instead of calculated.

Hard to judge lyrics without hearing the music, but I'll give this a 9.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: November 13, 2004 )





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