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Remember when the world
was painted rainbow hues?
When life was just so magical,
you never had the blues?

A butterfly and paperdoll
were lovely things to see,
and it was always proper to
ask Mr. Bear to tea?

Why is it that we cannot be
like every girl and boy?
Just use a bit of pixie dust
and find that childlike joy!

I promise you'll be happier
and smile a whole lot more,
and all the laughter from inside
will leave you on the floor.

We're all aware that you are
just as old as how you feel,
and if a child is in your heart,
then that's a real good deal!

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I've been trying to change my avatar for four years...


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The following comments are for "Childlike Joy"
by frenchie

very smoof
Can't find any faults. Very smoof reading. The ending could have more of a punchline.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 12, 2004 )

Ending
Yeah, the ending was a little weak. This was off-the-cuff, so to speak. My work seems to be a bit pessimistic lately, and I had actually started to write a rant about how depressing my life is, blah, blah, blah...then I thought better about it and deciced to play the optomist instead. Glad you enjoyed it, that was its point. :)

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: November 12, 2004 )

ahhh yes
life used to be so much easier.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 12, 2004 )





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