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You are my death. You touch my hand and the light washes out white and I hear the oceanís muffled rolling in my ears, deafness brought on by death. Your fingers tangle with mine and the sun shines too brightly through the trees and I am gasping my dying breath and seeing your eyes through the numb haze. I wrestle my hand away, bring myself back to life, and know that I can never trust someone who kills me so sweetly, without an ounce of malice. Your face in my waking moments is the same in my dying moments. You wrap yourself around me and it is the end, I can feel it. The dizziness, the palpitations in my chest, the blinding flashes of light. It is all death in your touch. Your lips against my ear, those words so soft and warm, I love you. The sweet death. The one I seek. You are my death.

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"When I write, I feel like an armless, legless man with a crayon in his mouth." - Kurt Vonnegut


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The following comments are for "Love"
by madrigals

Twilight of Life
You've drawn an engaging picture of the one's last moment, in an altered state of consciousness.

That's what I got anyway. Nicely written. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: November 9, 2004 )

You both have it, in a way
It's a little of both. It stemmed from a clip that played out in my head of someone who knew they were going to die remembering all of these things about their significant other, which then worked its way into my thinking about someone who is alternately good for me and bad for me. Which then evolved into love being death, needing someone to live even knowing that they are, inherently, going to be my end...

Even I can't really figure it out. :D

Thanks for the insight, guys :)

( Posted by: madrigals [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )

trans
I think it transcends death, it is a trance of the couple in bliss, and death is just a tag for a completion.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )





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