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I slept ten hours last night
And I'm wide awake now
But instead of living this life
I think I'll lay back down

And leave the nightmares to my dreams
Instead of facing them now
Sleep away all the time
Just to escape from this somehow

When I drift back off to sleep
You're nowhere in my head
Maybe this time I won't wake up
At this point, I might as well be dead

Laying there helplessly
hopelessly
Just leave me
to breathe unknowingly
Can't hear anything
much easier I think
Just to escape from this somehow

And leave the nightmares to my dreams
Instead of facing them now
Sleep away all the time
Just to escape from this somehow


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The following comments are for "Diagnose Me With a Coma"
by ForLackofaBetterName

haha...nicely done
yeah, i liked this writing too. its good to see a new author in the lyrics section. however, i do have a suggestion for this piece. the sixth line down, or the second line in the second stanza, however you want to say it, should say "instead of facing them right now" instead of "instead of facing them now". just a suggestion based on an opinion. good write though.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )

Beautiful
Sweet dreams.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )

mmm
thanks for both the comments, and I will change that..you're right. ps- i enjoy reading stuff by both of you

( Posted by: forlackofabettername [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )





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