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looking on with envy
distrust marked petals
frayed from so much
why the vase for them?
and the breeze for me
do not fret so much
taller flowers rise
season after season
they survive through
rest under their bows
new growth comes
from much pruning
through harsh sun
and bitter frost
they are still there
as you will be
swaying gently through
pinker and fuller
with each pass of sun
others will rest on you
appreciate the colour
till one day
you are plucked
to stand in pride
with nourishment ensuring
you never wilt or fray

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Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.


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The following comments are for "Uncut Flower (for Thinspiration)"
by londongrey

Thank you
That was one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. I like the imagry and the emotional drive. It is very well written. Thank you. :-)

( Posted by: thinspiration [Member] On: November 9, 2004 )

Uncut Flower
Thank you guys.

Thinspiration I wrote this because I see so much anger in you, I developed a really neat habit of being able to really forget someone while still walking away with the lesson, in fact it works so well I can't actually remember alot of detail about certain events in my life.

Don't drag it with you and carry it around all the time. I found that if I didn't tell new people who came into my life, it stayed in my past, does that makes sense?

I'm a cancerian so you gotta get used to me dipping around!! LOL!

Alex xx

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: November 10, 2004 )

Thorny
Ok, I admit it. I am a rose stem covered in thorns. Never denied it. Most of the poems Ive published on here were written between the ages of 14 and 18. Only one, was semi recent. I'm not as evil although I still sport some rather fashionable horns laced in poison to support my glowing halo of sweetness and purity.

( Posted by: Thinspiration [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )

oh boy!
i can't wait for you to write a poem about me! you think you will someday? haha...just kidding. i know, i'm not of the worth that thinspiration is. she's quite the artist....but thats not what i'm leaving this comment for. i think this is a great, very descriptive poem and very well written. i'm sorry that i waited so long to read it. very nicely done.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 12, 2004 )





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