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Author's Note:
School's been keeping my hands tied. >< However, I've still had some opportunity to write by way of the glory that is Creative Composition class. Huzzah! Here is one assignment: had to start out with the line "Where were you last night?" only two characters, couldn't be between a parent/child or romantic couple, keep it short. And of course [i]this[/] is where my mind goes. :D

"Where were you last night?"

Saul's head jerked up, his heartbeat jumping suddenly. He hadn't heard anyone come in over the sound of the running water, and it was only the familiar sight of his roommate's face over his shoulder in the mirror that stopped Saul from turning to take a swing at him.

"Nowhere," he said calmly, forcing his breathing to slow. He kept his eyes on Andy's through the glass and shifted casually until he was reasonably certain that his body was shielding the sink from view.

Andy frowned at Saul's reflection, crossing his arms over his chest. "Dude, I was this close to calling campus security. You know how dangerous it is out there." Shaking his head, Andy turned and padded out of view. "If you're gonna disappear like that again, at least leave a note or something next time, all right? Freaked me out, man."

Saul smiled at his roommate's concern. "Sorry," he said mildly to Andy's retreating back. He looked back down at the sink and the water running over his hands. There was still a clump of dirty blonde hair clinging to the edge of the hatchet head. He tugged at it, and it came off easily, swirling down the drain in a fresh rush of pink. "I'll try not to let it happen again."

"You need chaos within, to give birth to a dancing star."
-- Friedrich Nietsche

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The following comments are for "Last Night"
by Jei

Where were YOU?
Quintessential Flash! Excellent. 'dirty blonde hair' is a good detail, and not until the end do we find out what kind of 'swing' Saul contemplated.

Nicely done. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

Wish I could write 'em like that. Nicely executed.


( Posted by: QueasyDillo [Member] On: November 10, 2004 )

executed is the word allright. 20/20 hindsight - could have been 10-20% longer with more tangents to delightfully confuse the reader until the resolution.



( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

Don't even axe me about last night

Quick and creepy. First of yours I've read. Like Saul, you make a striking first impression.

( Posted by: drsoos [Member] On: November 14, 2004 )

Found you!
Ahh, so this is the story you wrote for Creative Comp. Cooooool.

( Posted by: WishicouldWrite [Member] On: November 28, 2004 )

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