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The world bursts forth into a restless Spring
All taut and thrumming with the din of arms
The Eagle's praises all the heralds sing
For beak and talon do make potent charms.

And yet in this arena strides no man
Upon whose brow a laurel could be laid
What hero spends the wealth of his life's span
To win a game which never should be played?

The sons and daughters of the sinking Sun
Still read the epics wrought in rocky isles
And thus we know the victor's will be done
But only on the just does Heaven smile.

I watch the Sun change clouds to gilded fleece,
and dream the myths and Gods of ancient Greece.

We do not see things as they are - we see them as we are. - Anais Nin

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The following comments are for "Sonnet for the people, Spring 2003"
by Chanda

Political Poetry
This poem is written very, very well, Chanda and you've got some lines here that I really like --

"All taut and thrumming with the din of arms"

"For beak and talon do make potent charms"

"I watch the Sun change clouds to gilded fleece"

Your meter is flawless and your word choice is brilliant.

The thing is I am left scratching my head a bit as to what the poem is actually saying.

Why do you conclude with dreams of ancient Greece?

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )

Gilded grins
This one puts me in Greece. I imagine myself running around with a sword hoping for August's laurel wreath. I feel like I am running through a hedge maze like in labyrinth and trying to find the enemy, another human, not minotaur. Muy bien, gracias.

( Posted by: xinerama [Member] On: December 8, 2004 )

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