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Sweet dreams and sugar candy
make me twist inside with lust
only a few seconds of pain
before I'm brought back
to the little part of hurt
that makes reality attractive
slight pangs of joy make,
real so much better.
Real love
that speaks of forceful
joining of gripped wrists,
arched backs
clammy palms
and curled toes.
It feels better in life
than in sweet dreams
certainly more than candy
you have to give in
and be taken with it
relax to be taken
with the force and cunning
of a devil after innocence


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Ask not what you can do to poetry, but what poetry can do to you.


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by londongrey

Sweet Dreams
Alex, first let me say how wonderful it is to see you around again! I missed seeing your adorable avatar and sweet comments.Ok, now back to your poem, thank you for helping start my Monday off wonderfully. I agree, dreams are sweet but the reality is somewhat better, ahem... Great job!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

sweet dreams
Huh- you have an interesting style going here. It's funny how the first thing you really notice about a poem is if it has something original going for it. This definitely does.

( Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

Sweet Dreams
You know I can never tell what sort of feedback I am going to get or what it's content will be.

Nae it's always good to hear from you, I totally agree it does always feel better in real life, nothing wring with a tiny bit if pain *AHEM*.

Tina I'm trying to write more sensual stuff at the moment, must be Mars in conjuction with Uranus or something, :-)

Sean I am honoured! You come from a perspective all your own, sometimes I'm baffled, other times I know exatly what you mean, thank you.

Windchime it scares me how well you get me. With every response to one of my pieces you seem to pick up on the undertone of what I am trying to say. I read one of your responses the other day, I think it was your husband, and the things you said gave me a really clear picture into who you are as a person, and it was a very nice image!

Thank you for your great comments!!

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: November 10, 2004 )

Londongrey
I almost didn't comment on this piece as the truth it impressed on me is quite painful. I have a tendency to rather choose dreaming to avoid the hurt that tags along with the sweetness of reality. And I hated this poem the first time I saw it, but it haunted me so. Now I think I am a bit more facing reality and savor its darkness and beauty, unlike before. Thank you for this very very good poem, so far, my other favorite besides 'Forgive Me'.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: November 12, 2004 )





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