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words leap from papyrus,
commanding to be read.
round orbs
perceive
their pleadings,
acquiesce
to their desires.
cranial regions
drink in murmurings,
shouts,
of expressions,
influenced
by each letter dispatched.
minds
are broadened.
eyes
are opened.
hearts
are changed.
because of
one writer
disposed
to dip his quill
in the lifeblood
of literary intelligence.


------
Jean Bailey Robor


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The following comments are for "Lexis"
by AngelChik

Angelchik's Lexis
AC: I got an overall disjointed feeling from this poem. It is a combination of the one-word lines and abruptness in writing style. I don't get the impression that you wanted to play it that way, but if so I'd emphasize that more.

GG

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: November 10, 2004 )

You're right!
You're right...it is disjointed. Great feedback. I've reworked it and think it works a little better now. Thanks for the input!

( Posted by: Angelchik [Member] On: November 12, 2004 )





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