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Bread
by chapter1 (Member) - published: November 7, 2004
Word Count: 23 Word Bytes: 131 Viewed: 299 times
Category - Poetry
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once we though it was good eats
now with the fuss over
carbs and sugar is it still
make my hundreds suagr free


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by chapter1

bread
LOL!
I hear the counterfeiters have been using aspartame...

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

good job
this poem is really good cause it applies to something everyday. the formulation of the words really made you think about the subject but i think it might be a little more catchy if you had a rhyme to it or a beat

( Posted by: englishgal16 [Member] On: March 16, 2005 )





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