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Why?

Why do I sit here and cry alone at night...
Wait for someone or something to save me...
Make everyone think that I am doing well...
Mess up my head by keeping it all inside?

Bear all my pains alone and hide them away...
Allowing them to beciome viscious undertones...
Keep my heart locked up away from even me...
Let my mind be fooled by my own facade?

Fallen family, lost friends, broken relationships...
The changing world spinning out of control...
Reality destroying the comforting imaginary...
But in all of life I forget which makes me sad.

New weights placed upon unbalanced scales
And each weight alone as light as a feather
Has become like heavy lead to these scales
Which weight will tip the scales into oblivion?

Anger, hatred, rage, pain, grief and fear...
Such powerful emotions so strong within me.
Happiness, comfort, peace, tranquility...
What are these strange emotions?

Here for a second but gone before the next
So fleeting these feelings, no time for memory
But it boils away beneath the surface, bubbling
And waiting to erupt with all the negatives of hell.


~ Can't remember when I wrote this one but I think it was september sometime ... ~

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Give me a reason to love life
Prove to me happiness is real
Show me the undying light of hope
And I will cast away the darkness.



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The following comments are for "Why?"
by one.true.lady.uk

Why.UK
You've got some raw emotion surging through this poem. It reads like the transcipt of a tirade. I can see diary pages flying across the room!

The forth stanza seemed weak to me. Maybe its the word 'scales' showing up so often. 'light as feather' is cliche and 'heavy lead' is redundant. Hope this helps. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

Hmm
Your right it is a weak stanza and could do with some revision but I sdon't mine the cliche an 'heavy lead' is an emphasis.

( Posted by: one.true.lady.uk [Member] On: November 9, 2004 )

I agree with Philo
The 4th stanza could be removed without harming the poem at all. This is all-out ranting about the unfairness of everything, but kept under control - just. Gives a sense of an impending explosion. Nice work again, Bex.
Take care
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: November 9, 2004 )





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