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Dreams

Confusion in the night time mind.
Created by vague day time illusions.
Conquored only in the waking sound.
Concious and sub-concious as one.

Dreams, the blissful moonlight escape.
Delirious, the release from sunny reality.
Devestated by the vile hidden truths.
Destroyed visions of my old thoughts.

What I thought was mine was not...
What I wanted to be the truth was lies...
We were over long ago, or so I thought...
Where does this frail heart lie tonight?

Sat high upon the chilly mountain top, so high,
Shrouded in cloudy senses he rescued me.
Safe within his arms as we reached the bottom,
Softly we sat and his hands slipped over mine.

Lost between the realms of dream and reality.
Love blossomed again with that gentle touch.
Late was the time of this realisation but
Lovers sat peacefully upon a bench holding hands.

Gone as the dream fades and the touch wanes.
Gloomy in my waking moments from the loss
Glorious peace and warmth banished with the light
Golden moments trapped in lost feelings, still here?

Just a dream or are those feelings still real. Am I
Justified in a hope that we may yet be, or not?
Jackal of the mind, the memory of vivid touch
Jaded hope remains questioning ... is it or was it?


~ This one is a little old .. late June sometime I think. ~

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Give me a reason to love life
Prove to me happiness is real
Show me the undying light of hope
And I will cast away the darkness.



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The following comments are for "Dreams"
by one.true.lady.uk

Welcome Bex
I read your bio, and that is where poetry comes from, sometimes fullforce, within the tender spots of our heart.
This is such a nice poem full of pain, hope as a life preserver.

I am looking forward to more Bex from you. For a first posting, congratulations on this nice write. I do welcome you to Lit. This is a nice place to be.

Darlene

( Posted by: dareva [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

First Posting
That's a bit of a lie really, I have been bopping around the site for a little over a year but early this year after successive lack of response I deleted rather tediously deleting all 60 of my entries and am only just trusting to start again considering I haven't really written anything even slightly decent or at all for a while so ... welcome back, is more appropriate. Some of my older stuff will still be hanging around the forums as death_and_her_cat ... good luck finding them :D Anyway thanks for your comments, didn't realise people even bothered with the bio's really.

( Posted by: one.true.lady.uk [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

YES, I read the bios.
oh, cool and I will look through the forums for your other work...and by the way,,,,,Welcome back!!!

Darlene ;-)

( Posted by: dareva [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

History
I just re-read the poem oddly enough at the mention of the quote ... it is one of my happier piecies but with sad undertones. This is actually about a dream I had of my first 'love' well I thought it was love at the time but after all these months I figured out it was just the hope of love. I held onto him too long, lucky I let him go though he's got a 14 year old pregnant now, and he was 15 at the time... I turned 16 almost a year before he did ... m 17 now ... sorry, just felt like giving a bit of background ... not like it really matters.

( Posted by: one.true.lady.uk [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

Hiya-welcome back!
It's so good to hear from you again, Bex. You certainly know how to make an entrance, or should that be enchantment. This is gorgeous writing, nice one.
Take care
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

Thanks
Thanks everyone. I have more stuff waiting to be validated but it is taking absolutely forever. Love and Pain are good inspirers I know that much for certain. I won't be having any more heartaches though ... I was sworn of lads before him and I still am. I got caught up in emotions I was creating with my own imagination. Either way thanks for the comment this has been the most commenting I have ever had on a poem methinks, cept in the forums.

( Posted by: one.true.lady.uk [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )





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