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The world seems frozen
A crocus peeks through the snow
A new beginning

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The following comments are for "Spring"
by frenchie

Purple
Oh, the crocus is definately purple. I really can't imagine it any other color....expecially yellow....ugh. I'm glad you liked it.

( Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: November 11, 2004 )

Spring Haiku
The elements of real Haiku are there. Strong imagery, correct format, however; perhaps a change with the "A" of the second line and starting the third line with "A". Although it works as it is fine, a definte conveying of the flower on the backdrop of snow. Stark. That is the magic glimpse of Haiku. Good job,..Snake-Eyes

( Posted by: SnakeEyes [Member] On: January 14, 2005 )

Nice
Excellently said! ANd how present, and willfully impending...

( Posted by: webguy [Member] On: February 27, 2005 )





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