The following comments are for "Spring" by frenchie
I just saw this, and I like it. I'm taking the liberty of imagining this crocus as purple. Please say it's purple, and not yellow, or, ugh, white, peeking through the snow... With the world seeming frozen, I think the crocus needs a cold colour...
Posted by: windchime [Member] On: November 11, 2004
Oh, the crocus is definately purple. I really can't imagine it any other color....expecially yellow....ugh. I'm glad you liked it.
Posted by: frenchie [Member] On: November 11, 2004
The elements of real Haiku are there. Strong imagery, correct format, however; perhaps a change with the "A" of the second line and starting the third line with "A". Although it works as it is fine, a definte conveying of the flower on the backdrop of snow. Stark. That is the magic glimpse of Haiku. Good job,..Snake-Eyes
Posted by: SnakeEyes [Member] On: January 14, 2005
Excellently said! ANd how present, and willfully impending...
Posted by: webguy [Member] On: February 27, 2005
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