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You enter,
Your auburn hair playing in the light,
Your luscious red smile,
Girl for you Id fight,
You’re the prettiest girl I’ve ever seen,
Or maybe it’s the acid,

You could be the one,
Your voice like silk,
Your eyes like wine,
Your skin like slightly tanned milk,

It could be the acid,
Or it could be the dope,
Babe, when you enter no one is flaccid,
You fill me full of hope,

You’re beautiful,
You positively glow,
The drugs begin to ware off,
And I know…

It was the acid.

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Preserve Nature, Pickle a squirrel.


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The following comments are for "Acid"
by Alec

rate?
why do you rate your own songs?

you also might want to change id to i'd or straight up i would.

jimmy g.

( Posted by: JimmyAndHisRocket [Member] On: November 7, 2004 )





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