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not okay
by stupidfreak (Member) - published: November 4, 2004
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Category - Poetry
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Every time I think of us I cry.
Every time I see you with some other guy.
I feel like tearing him apart.
I’m not okay with out you.
I’m not okay with out you.
I’m never okay.



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by stupidfreak

not okay?
great start,but took on too much teenage angst....

would have been better like:

Everytime I think of us
I cry
When I see you with another guy
my heart breaks again
I think of you both day and night
wondering
How can I make things right?

( Posted by: thebeast [Member] On: November 6, 2004 )





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