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scream like a dirty revolution, feel your vocal contraption vibrate, write a catchy song underground, drop a record, drop your privacy, drop everything to make it work; drop your baby, drop your girl, drop your keys, drop your life in a puddle that won't evaporate: it suffocates like a static blanket.

get addicted, get a gig, on a plane it's all the same, so smoke a cigarette and get off with a cheap smutrag in a dirty apartment, lonely and pissing on the notebooks full of blue ideas and jade hope; hope you don't mind that you're wasting away in fame, oh well, whatever, nevermind, but it died.



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The following comments are for "a vague ode to grunge"
by verve

verve
Now this one I liked. A bit more clarity. Still that stream of conciousness obscurity that works so well for you. Talk to you soon.

( Posted by: praxidikai [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )

Verve
Verve, Some more interesting stuff. Even though your writing tends to go in the direction of the abstract, I can still almost see images in my mind of what you are describing. Later, Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )

poetry should make sense
Verve, I've read a few of your poems and they really suck. Didn't you ever learn that poetry is supposed to make sense? Even Kurt Cobain's lyrics usually make sense and they weren't supposed to be poetry; they were supposed to sound cool. Anyway, I love grunge so much that I took a look at this piece but I wish I hadn't.

( Posted by: Seanspacey [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )

really?
thanks for the suggestion. i'll use flash cards next time.

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )

Some cool ideas
Your stuff is very hard to rate. On one hand they're loaded with great imagery and fabulous lines. On the other, they could tie together a little better. But overall I like them. Your poetry is like a crazy roller coaster ride through a decaying part of town--chaotic, somewhat depressing but when it's done, I want another ride. Richard

( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )





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