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Harder,
until my apologies
are deafening.
Break my will
leave me standing
alone in a crowd of none.
grasping for this false security
It痴 too much.
leaning your crutch of my disaster
on this already bruised heart.
Creating a space in that poor black broken thing,
which you値l use as an escape.
I whisper to myself
that I needed you.
that without you I知 a poor misery.
A lonely excuse for a wholesome life.
A sorry nightmare,
A dismal reality that you yourself have brought upon me,
And with this day you pollute me.
Leaving me in the wake of my own dust.
I wish that my screams
would rise through me.
ending this
Sending this to another day.
To another world of filth.
But through the silence
I知 waiting.
Hoping and wishing that my morning will come.
And when the bleak sun rises over crumbling words
you値l see what you致e done.
You値l taste the feelings
you took from me.
And until your final breathe is lost,
cast out into oblivion.
I will make you suffer.
I値l make you real.



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The following comments are for "the crowd of none"
by DEMONeyesBLUE

The crowd of none
Well written, a little long if anything but there's nothing that stands out as being extraneous.
Put across the feeling perfectly.

Jonathan.

( Posted by: JonnyT [Member] On: November 2, 2004 )

thanks
thanks man It took me a while to write it.

( Posted by: DEMONeyesBLUE [Member] On: November 2, 2004 )





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