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A fanciful battle in the night....

Darkness looms in the forest deep
A chilling dampness grips the night
Bats in flight, diseased, in fury
Circle, awaiting a chance to strike

Demonic eyes glare, then gone in haste
A blanket of fog settling fast
With quickening steps I forge ahead
A tangle of limbs clawing and gnarled

Gripped in fear of my pending fate
My quest to conquer, the beast awaits
A river of blood flowing past my feet
Poisenous creatures and crawling things

Exhaustion plays to the enemy
In hiding, cloaked in misery
Breathing fire and spitting out scorn
A hunger for death in its belly churns

Climbing the stairs of stone past the moat
Drawing my sword, shield raised to the fire
Lashing from jaws of the dragon within
Defying my presence, the battle begins

With sweeping blows piercing armoured flesh
This awakened serpent fighting in rage
Lord of the castle, guardian dark
Bleeding a death wound, slithers away

A torbid sky burning announces the kill
While winds rage in a furious swirl
Then calm with the sunrise at first light
Slayed, the monster forever sleeps

Don MacIver
Come on a journey with me...where eagles soar.

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The following comments are for "In A Castle Sleeps"
by EaglesSoar

Swashbuckling fun
Nicely done and fun to read.

Is 'Poisenous' and English/Commonwealth spelling? -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: November 3, 2004 )

"In a Castle Sleeps"
Love when the dragon gets slayed! very vivid- nice write - thanks

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: November 4, 2004 )

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