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my voice is black and blue in the afternoon, but i swallow blood just fine, so i'm barechested in the blank room, watchin' my stomach rise and fall while i try to stop breathing, it just doesn't work; monochrome plays with my brain and my eyes are bleeding moss 'cause the inky oceans are so pretty, like snot: it's cold and my throat hurts when i drink razorblades like gatorade.

my smile masturbates while i twitch like sydenham's son, feels like an alcohol rubbing with a lazy barber, shaves my head like a shitfaced monk; you're a brother, i'm a sister when you're here, near my mouth like a prostitute and friday is green death day, i like glue in the spring after dinner with my velvet and schnapps, but you loved brandy so we never smoked: can't breathe underwater, eat coral like candy, so plan b is to bribe a big fish.



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Verve, Your stuff just gets more and more interesting! All of the ideas you use are abstract, but unique to each poem. This makes gives your writing an always interesting and new flavor. The more I read the more I like your stuff. Later, Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: April 30, 2002 )

verve
oh baby, you make me feel so dirty.Nice work.

( Posted by: praxidikai [Member] On: April 30, 2002 )

drastine
maybe.. but, for me, it's the contrary: i'm on a hiatus right now because everything started to sound the same, and that's when a break is called for, i think. i dunno exactly what form i might take up next; continue with poetry thingos, stories, a blog (which i've already experimented with, and hasn't been updated in a month or so.. it's at http://blur.diary-x.com/), or i might just stop altogether. we'll see.

( Posted by: verve [Member] On: April 30, 2002 )

Verve
Whatever you decide to do with your talent, I can not wait to see it. Like I have already said I think you have some great stuff started and would love to see anything else you come up with. Later, Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: May 1, 2002 )





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