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You never get naked anymore
you said one evening in the house of cards we built together
And I don't like what you're wearing

I view myself in the mirror of truths
usually clouded with the dust of my denials

I suspect you like the nothingness I wore when you first touched my naked gossamer Spring dew, delicate to your touch
But the Winters of you have left me frostbitten

Behold, I am wearing my cloak of many colors beaded with the sequins and sparkle of jewels borne of disappointment and tears

The tears I shed from your infidelities and lies bloomed into glittering jewels I found lying on the floor next to my shattered visions of you

and so unwittingly I wove this cloak with the threads of my despair and the jewels you gave to me
more vivid than the coal you pass off as diamonds
and I realize that I will never be naked again


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All that we see or seem, is but a dream within a dream....
Edgar Allen Poe


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The following comments are for "Naked"
by poesandpoetry

PP...
...this is one of the best poems here I've read in a good while. Why hasn't it gotten more attention? Houses of cards, gossamer Spring dew -

'The tears I shed from your infidelities and lies bloomed into glittering jewels I found lying on the floor next to my shattered visions of you'

That is one to keep on the fridge. I rarely, if ever, rate work, since it's sort of useless, but I'm giving you a ten.

Didn't like the double 'touch' in your third stanza, but that's minor.

Wow.

Wow.

-SD

( Posted by: strangedaze [Member] On: February 12, 2005 )

pandp....The "Naked" Truth
Investing all this time at Lit does pay off, periodically. This is one of those times. Primo piece. Hope you can be "naked" again.


Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 12, 2005 )





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