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(new line) - For JeanPaul

To touch... that magical moment
When your eyes smile,
Holding close, my closed palm to heart.
Whisper soft... your fingertips upon my throat,
Unspoken surrender... wide-eyed trust.
Relief... for everything I donít seem to need to say,
Understanding beyond paltry means of expression,
Though we strive nonetheless... ever searching.
To touch... exquisite intoxication
On this I can live alone,
Deeply surrounded by love of those I call my own.
You are one I love, insatiable friendship
Hours ever melting... soundlessly away.
How dear to me your presence... how precious,
To touch... you are one I call my own.


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The following comments are for "To Touch"
by De`esse

Oooh...
De'esse,

This was very awesome I liked this a lot. I have to agree with Jessicanm with that your poem is just heightened by not using the words, I love you. This poem beautifully portrays something that is so simple but so potent.

Later,
Dras

( Posted by: Drastine [Member] On: April 25, 2002 )

to De'sse
That was sweet. Drastine said all I want to say. I am very impressed with how you showed instead of tell.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: April 25, 2002 )

Thank You
Thank you very much for your comments.

Having and alternative practice and belief of relationships i think helps me to term things both simply as 'i love you' that's all i need to know, that's the bottom line type thing. however... beyond that when i want to expressly show how much one of my Special Ones means to me beyond, 'i love you' it gets me thinking... being involved in more than one relationship gives you clarity on why and how and what, and opens up a whole new wonderful vocab - i love it!!!

this poem is for a friend of mine, a very dear close friend - who is just as much craving of monstrous amounts of affection as i am - so it works out well :) We have fun *grins*

Thank you.... it means a lot.

Ju =*_*=

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: April 26, 2002 )

none
I like the poem. It's well written and gives a person insight into how boy/girl relationships work. It's a little too sentimental but then again....the poem is about sentiment. So it's kind of the nature of the beast.

( Posted by: Seanspacey [Member] On: April 30, 2002 )





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