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Lonely depths of purple sea
Take me where I want to be
Drifting in your gentle strength
Carry me across your length
Ferry me from all the dreams
Frayed apart like broken seams
Lying shattered on the shore
Bits and pieces on the moor
Smashed by such careless whim
Time has taken more than limb
Piece by piece my soul was torn
By each broken promise sworn
Ripped away was hope and trust
Leaving just a ruined crust
Now the king’s horses have tried
And all the king’s men cried
But I was never one again

~..::Forever Silver::..~

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The following comments are for "Misty Reality"
by sexysilver

I was really loving this until the Humpty Dumpty at the end. You have some very beautiful, powerful, and unexpected verse here. I like it very much.


( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )

You and Humpty
I agree. This poem is very good. It seems to have a lot of you in it and a little humpty. I think it would be better if it was all you.

The preceding lines are really strong and deserve a powerful ending. The last line seems a little lost. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )

Missplaced Humpty
Thanks. I kind of realized that Humpty Dumpty was a little out of place but I just gave up after trying to figure out an ending for days. I'll go back and try to think of a better ending.

( Posted by: sexysilver [Member] On: February 13, 2005 )

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