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Watch the eclipse Wednesday, 27Oct04


I

Perched high above in velvet lair,
With stars like diamonds in her hair.
Glimm'ring dew drops, in hallowed lace,
Shimmer and shine about her face.

Her raiment dusky, luminous gray;
Edged with azure in light of day.
Delicate jacquard embroidered gown.
Our hope, and sight, when sun is down

Ever in eons; evermore!
A sign of love in ageless yore.
Longing pursuit of fiery mate,
Locked within our earth's embrace.

Glory, surely, in thy mien,
From oceans blue and forests green.
Ever there is turned her gaze,
But thoughts of Brightness fill her days.

Blissful is earth in his rapture,
Vies ever her love to capture.
But by our earth, her heart's not won,
Mate of her soul's within the sun.

Ever, anon, love pirouettes,
Just out of reach, and soon begets,
Tumult of fury, jealous rage,
Blinding earth for age upon age.

A plan is hatched in tortured mind,
Result of temper less than kind.
Reckless is he whom love has scorned.
Prudent thought now fettered and shorn.

"Attack!" he cries, with sundering seas,
"Lasting darkness, for thine and thee!"
Blackened veil o'er her face then crept.
In ageless exile then, she wept.

Only after foul deed was done,
Did she her warlike armor don.
Raiment gray was replaced in flood,
With wrathful, churning, tempest blood.

Silent screaming her battle cry,
Enraging champions from on high.
Fiercely they lit about her face,
Demanding redress for disgrace.

Her darkness trumpets their advance.
About her crown, formations dance.
If her honor they can't restore,
Gauntlet is thrown. They march to war.

II

Slowly moves the war of sky
In time not meant for men.
Fleeting crashes the tumults cry,
As men's eyes perceive heaven.

A thousand years within a day the mighty warriors lean.
A thousand more outside our time, with weapons yet unseen.
A moment more the earth resigns in black night calls "Parlay!"
A treaty drawn. A wrong redressed. Her face has won the day.

From her countenance, grudgingly,
The shadow slides away.
Retreating sad, but lovingly,
Earth has lost the day.

When battle gear has served its need
Blood then fades to gray.
Earth weeps now in insatiable greed,
Though she agrees to stay.

In dusky raiment again she's donned
More brilliant than afore.
Love's sparkling light upon her mons,
From he whom she adores.

Hung high above, in velvet lair
With diamonds in her crown.
Naught else on earth or in the air
More lovely than her gown.

Wisps of dew create hallowed lace,
Whilst stars shine about her face.
Glorious lantern in night's sky,
Who's love for sun will never die.

Verily now her vict'ry won,
Glory restored, her liege the sun.
With inert cruelty she now taunts
Her scorned lover, who's dreams she haunts.

A thousand, thousand years he'll grieve,
And about the sun a tapestry weave,
With endless streams of love's lost tears,
In avarice dance throughout the years.



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The following comments are for "Eclipse"
by Philo

Lunar love
After reading some of your comments I thought I'd check and see something of yours. This is phenomenal. A classic born. I will print this to share, giving credit where it's do, if you don't mind.
I was already looking forward to the eclipse. Now it's sure to make my spine tingle twice!
thanks for this. beautiful-
Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: October 26, 2004 )

Emaks, Lunar Opera
High praise indeed and I would be delighted if you'd like to share this.

I was going for that bombastic largess that opera uses to tell stories of grand scale. And what grander scale than celestial love triangles? -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: October 27, 2004 )

Good Imagery
It reminds me of some form of mythology. I wish I had read this before I watched the eclipse. It would have made my own viewing of the eclipse a lot more substantial.

It also makes me wish that I was good at visual illustration. This poem inspires images that I can barely see in my mind, let alone produce.

( Posted by: JEnglish [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )

Eclipse imagery
Thanks for stopping by JEnglish and I'm glad you liked it. Mythology is what inspired this. There are stories about the moon chasing the sun across the sky from a variety of traditions but none that included a love triangle that I can recall. Probably because the earth was thought of as the center of the universe with the sun and moon circling. -Philo

( Posted by: Philo [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )

Lunar dance
Just had to tell you- we had clouds last night. I was bummed. Understand the next is March 2007 (I'm a glass half full sort). If not for you I'd have had only clouds for this eclipse. You gave me my only show, and it was a good one. Wanted to say thanks. - Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )

Eclipse
Hi Philo
enjoyed this wouldn't mind seeing an eclipse above the clouds...
many thanks for your interest and comments.
They are appreciated.
Thanks
len

( Posted by: crowhaven [Member] On: October 29, 2004 )

lunar longitude
That's right, it is one lo-oong poem and an admirable one. Again, classy. Byronic influence, by any chance (II-2), my fav 8 syllable meter(generally) and other locations,?

I could not write something so consistent and long. In the Submit queue I have a modestly longish ode to Lesbos, where I'd gotten bored with the topic towards the end. I am surprised it came out decently rhymed.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: November 4, 2004 )

Eclipsed
CROWHAVEN: Thanks for reading, sorry you didn't get a chance to see the real show.

DEMETER: Yes, you caught me. I am Truman Capote. Does that make you my Aunt Sam? Thanks for the kind words.

TEFLON: Thanks for coming by to read this. I haven't read Byron. I probably should, he seems like my kind of guy.

In II-2 I was looking for a change that would accentuate the break between the parts and set the tone for part II. I'm trying to 'stretch' time.

TINALOUISE: I don't know what to say. I'm delighted that you enjoyed this. Thank you very much stopping to read this and your very kind words.

'Luscious' alone would have been enough to have me smiling for days!

With Gratitude - Philo

( Posted by: philo [Member] On: November 8, 2004 )

Lovely
This has the lyrical feel, emotional weight, and delicate construction of a Romance classic.

Excellent.

( Posted by: chanda [Member] On: November 24, 2004 )





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