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Held firm to the ground, his body taut,
He did nothing, but contemplate the ramifications that would and occurred.
His mind vulnerable to the temptations.
How had he dug this hole?
For now, there seemed no way out.
His propensities so predictible, the fiend knew it,
And so with fiery arrows did he attack with.
Long are the days of freedom,
Lomg are the days of laughter.

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The following comments are for "Tied"
by Henriamaa

I liked the beginning. It was the last 2 lines that seemed as though they didn't belong. Maybe it could be rephrased so that it flows more smoothly or if you seek to have it cut sharp then to have it flow in a sharp way. Which ever method you choose. It just seemed odd.

( Posted by: Thinspiration [Member] On: October 30, 2004 )

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