The following comments are for "Shudder" by Bartleby
powerful, good use of the form. I notice you like haiku. This is my fav one so far.
Posted by: malthis [Member] On: October 21, 2004
I haven't seen haiku used in such an erotic fashion, but somehow it works rather well. Good structure and word play.
Posted by: TheGadfly [Member] On: October 21, 2004
For me not being a Haiku fan, it is obvious this one is good. Even I enjoyed it. I wonder why, ahem... You're on a roll Bart. Jess must be some muse.
Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 21, 2004
This is a wonderful sensual Haiku...I think I remember what that feels like...now I just shudder cause I'm cold...Kacee
Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 21, 2004
I bow to the king of haiku!...ok maybe that's going a bit far. but damn Bart, this is one awesomely seductive, and brilliantly written haiku....my hat's off to you...very well done indeed!