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She is not mine, nor I hers as yet, but I dream of the union and all these little things
I long to find her lightly colored lipstick on the edge of a wine glass from the night before
To find her dainty underthings soaking in the bathrooms washbasin overnight when I awake
Her short, soft, fluffy bathrobe hanging from the hook on the back of the bathroom door
The faint smell of her potpourri wafting from the candle heated pot on the dresser
Of her delicately thin night robe, draped on the back of the chair next to our bed
The candles that are placed on the ledge of the bath tub and their scent that still fills the air
The fragrance of her perfume throughout the house long after we have returned from our night out
How she drapes her clothes on the chair, slips off her heels and slides into bed naked, next to me
I dream too, of her hair, long and beautiful, as it lay on the pillow as if placed there perfectly
Shining in the moonlight through our bedroom window as we lay embracing
The way she pulls her hair behind her ear on one side and tips her head smiling, waiting for a kiss
As we embrace my hand smoothes the skin of her back and hip and I pull her closer, hold her tighter
The soft sigh as she relaxes more and more with my embrace, as I kiss her neck and shoulder
Most of all I dream of her sleeping as I admire her beauty and listen to her rhythmic breathing
The soft smile upon her lips, her gentle curves and the softness of the skin as I gently stroke its coolness
The way we spoon in slumber, my arm over her and her hand pulling, holding my arm tightly
The light fragrance of her hair when I awake and the warmth of her skin as we press against each other

------
Daniel Lloyd Kennedy


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The following comments are for "It's The Little Things I Want..."
by daprdan

Beautiful Dan.....
Absolutely complete devotion shines through.

( Posted by: CJHerlihy [Member] On: October 20, 2004 )

Amazing
Wow, that's beautiful. You give me hope for beauty and romance and all the good stuff.

( Posted by: Revelation [Member] On: October 20, 2004 )

Just for you
Here daprdan, your poem inspired me to write this, so it's just for you:


No more Whys

Framed images of you
Panting, longing
Ripe apricot mouth
Teething, seeking
Romantic poems tossed in the fire
Curtains drawn to outside
You breathe me in
Then push my hair aside
Passivity died purple
Stroking nakedness
Satiated inside
You and I shall rise
To these tides of change
Maybe Ill cradle you in the dawn
This time
Then I wont need to ask
Why
Well just be there
Occasionally disengaging
To quench our thirst
But for the most part
Well twist our legs together
Piled up in a heap of Sundays
And let the people pass us by

( Posted by: Revelation [Member] On: October 20, 2004 )

I agree with Claire.
What a lucky girl you have chosen! I would melt on the spot if my boyfriend ever wrote something so beautiful and romantic about me.

( Posted by: novagirl [Member] On: October 21, 2004 )

I Thank You...
All... And I am glad you enjoyed it so much...

I wanted to share some of my daily thoughts I have, of how I see her and I together... and my enjoyment of being with her, in her world...

The little things seem so important when shared with the one you love... I know that my thoughts will make it happen one day...

While waiting for it to transpire, I must visualize it happening and do something everyday, for it to come about...

Again, Thank you all for commenting... Your thoughts become things, choose the good ones... :o)

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: October 21, 2004 )

A Special Thank You...
To Revelation... I have read your poem in the comment over and over... I believe you have caught (whether intentionally or not) the essence of my feelings... I admit, I am a romantic and it is hard to stray from this... even in the day to day things in my life... Maybe that is why there is passion in all that I do... The romanticism shines through... My world may seem fairy tale in my writing... but it is what I feel and try to achieve in real life every day... and love is the most important part of that life for me... in all shapes and forms... in everything I do...

So Thank You Once again, Revelation...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: October 22, 2004 )

So glad!
I am so glad you are a romantic. It is hard for the artists and sensitive souls, and they know little of how much they move the world in better directions. It is a great and courageous gift, so thank YOU :)

And be sure to bestow that AMAZING love and warmth on someluckyone, if not her.

( Posted by: Revelation [Member] On: October 22, 2004 )

ah the faint smell
did you say "dainty underthings"?
(i laughed at that the most)
or do you have some other things
you feel you need to post

did you use "faint smell" twice?
did you write "spoon in slumber"?
the phrase for this (be warned: not nice)
is (sorry) dumb and dumber

a poet uses sin
disdains cliches, canards
congratulations, friend
for your lovely hallmark cards


( Posted by: mercer102 [Member] On: October 23, 2004 )

and yet
and yet i haven't even started on the punctuation and grammar. sometimes an apostrophe can make all the diff

( Posted by: mercer102 [Member] On: October 25, 2004 )

Thank You...
Mercer120...

Fortunately for me, and unfortunately for you, this is not Burger King... You simply can't "have it your way..."

EHHHHHHHHHHHHH... NOoo?!... but thanks for playing... Johnny, what consolation prize do we have for our player ?

Ohhh... I'm sorry... we are fresh out.. :o)

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: October 27, 2004 )

Dan,
How I missed this? Hallmark cards,,,LOL..oh well let mercer believes what he wants. The truth is that things sounding "Cliche" make the world go around.
I found this quite nice Dan, from your warm soul to share with others who have that same positiveness as you have.

And Romantic IS what you are, who you are, never change honey.

Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )

The little things...
I am with novagirl, would melt if someone wrote or thought this way about me. You described beautifully the way you see her in your minds eye. What romance, and so much desire. I absolutely love this.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 28, 2004 )





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