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Tears and the Rain.


After cutting the apple in halves,
and chewing one slowly,
she had sat there for a while,
staring at the deserted room,
uninvinting herself to stay any longer.

The whole,
now had become a nothing.

She wrote her letter all over the walls.
Opened the windows,
and forgot to close the door.
Than walked out.

Tears.
She said it was the rain.

He found the door opened,
and the empty room had written walls.


------
Another Day On Earth


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The following comments are for "Tears and the Rain."
by therethere

Different
I like this. It is different from what I normally read on this site, but it leaves a lot of food for thought. I love your ending,
"Tears.
She said it was the rain.

He found the door opened,
and the empty room had written walls."

It leaves you wanting more!!! Great Read

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: October 25, 2004 )





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