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Well may as well go with it though it'll probably be useless or just as painful to read back.

A jagged shard of glass slowly inserted in the corner of the eye forces it way down through my cheekbone and sets a fire burning in my beetroot red ear. A mindnumbing bodyfreezing streak of pain jangles along neurotic pathways from the paintip tip to the tiny hole in the molar. Tender exposed nerves screech in a sudden inhalation of breath that howls across the chasm and tooth nerve like a searing flame.

Wight hott daggers of dammnation spear like iron spikes into the top of my pulsing cranium and the moment becomes suspended in a toe-cuurling teeth-clenching muscle-spasming time-stretching peak of the ectsacy of blinding white agony.

In its aftermath an appreciation of its abscence.

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Like the grasses showing tender faces to each other, thus should we do, for this was the wish of the Grandfathers of the World.

Black Elk




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The following comments are for "puncture wounds"
by smithy

Wounded
As always, your descriptions captivate. Ouch.

( Posted by: poesandpoetry [Member] On: October 19, 2004 )

hey p&p & pen
Hi P&P, good to hear from you. Thanks for reading and commenting. I hope to use it somewhere later.
Thanks pen. Not a big fan of the dentist myself. I was hoping they might use stem cells to grow new teeth and push out the old ones. That would suit me more than the big steel needle going into the tender flesh. Oi! Thank goodness for drugs. ;)


( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: October 20, 2004 )

Smithy
I like how you write blogs and make them useful another time. I learn from this, but I write my journals on paper I am still not much confident displaying my prose in its perfect rawness. Here, and everytime, you write with very good imagery and you always get my attention. Cheers, Peter ;)

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: October 21, 2004 )

hi peter
Thanks peter.
It's a little bit of just let go and see what comes out. Do you have an ideas page Peter? You write down the date and the idea and then you try to write about it then or later. And keep a log of all your writings, even the little snippets.
Actually I haven't had a printer for a year and just started printing everything out as hardcopy which is just so good to read. I'd encourage you to try Peter because seeing it out there seems to give different perspective somehow. Sometimes you get surprised by something others notice. Take care Peter. Hope to see more soon. Still working on next Bowman story.
cheers Peter, thanks for reading and commenting.
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: October 21, 2004 )

Mick
Guess I'll try that by writing a blog here, let me see... hmm.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 22, 2004 )

peter
Sometimes I read around the posts a bit first and I find that this gets me thinking creatively. Then when something, some spark or launch pad is there, it's just try to go with it. Good luck Peter. I look forward to reading your works.
mick

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: October 22, 2004 )





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