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There once was a man from China,
Who was an expert climber.
He fell on a rack,
And broke his back,
And now he's not a climber.

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~ Blind courage is another way to say stupidity.


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by 00Greenleaf00

climber
since the poem is so short, i don't like that climber is used twice, the first one could be replaced i think with a different word...

( Posted by: supergranny [Member] On: October 23, 2004 )

limericks
Hi Greenie.
Well, I always enjoy these humurous limericks you dabble in. They are light and fun but I still find them a little off the beat of a real flowing limerick. It still feels a syllable short in some of the lines. Also, I get the feeling you used climber twice as a sort of whimsical matter-of-fact conclusion. It just needs to be a touch more sophisticated to work well though. Eg:
"Now the climber from China is no climber." Or something better than that. "Now the climber from China is a recliner." Maybe?? Keep having fun.
cheers
smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: October 23, 2004 )





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