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crumbling prison
by hbaybb (Member) - published: October 20, 2004
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Category - Poetry
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Locked inside these walls of bone
Feelings and mind, I will hone
Red bracelets formed by the mind
Emotional wounds of the same kind
The bone loses it's captivity
As around it spreads sanguinity


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The following comments are for "crumbling prison"
by hbaybb

Cool
What an evocative piece. It really got me thinking. I'm still thinking about it. I especially liked the last line: As around it spreads sanguinity.

A great, great ending. Thank you so much.
Bravo!

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: October 20, 2004 )





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