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Hearing your voice
in its sudden urge to move
on, to go where you
need to go,
without me.

Knowing that is not the
path you chose for me
or you, is more painful
than the sound of your
voice telling me
you must go.

Your arms will not hold
me anymore, your eyes
will dare not love me
at a distance, far away
from you.

Submission, as I hear
the chaos surrounding
you, I can say no secrets
or understand no sense
from your speech.
you must go. Cautious eyes
watch me and wary hearts
scrutinize you.


I will sit here alone,
waiting for you,
in case the chaos subsides,
in case the dreams you
had for me and you,
should somehow become
more than vigilant dreams.

Be sure my heart has never
Left you,
I am yours, here, waiting.


------
"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding" Khalil Gibran, The Prophet




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The following comments are for "Vigilant Dreams"
by Serendipity

Mona
Very sad Mona. The constant mention of me and you made the poem even sadder. Vigilant dreams is such a nice title and a contradicting expression, but you were able to explain how it could be in your poem.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: October 18, 2004 )

Serendipity
I agree with Peter...The best part about this poem, is the raw emotion that is so artfully portrayed...It pulls at the reader's heart and draws them in...very well done.
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: October 18, 2004 )





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