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Ninth Symphony looms.
third movement wrings hands nibble-cute
perfumed gloves slap me.


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The following comments are for "Red Door"
by Teflon

"nibble-cute!"
I beg to differ! Haiky is precisely the venue for saying succinctly "the hands, or the fingers, were so cute and wrung so passionately that they looked good enough to kiss and nibble, which I did."

What do you say to that?
______________
Lady Fingers:
2 parts Gin
1 part cherry liqueur
2 parts Cherry brandy

TeflonZ

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 18, 2004 )

the kissiest word

Author's Note:
Please don't take it personally that my opinion differs. :-)


I got no problems with this; I only assume that "nibble-cute" is the cutest, kissiest word in the context of a serious setting such as a pompous philharmonic.



TeflonZ

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 18, 2004 )

Kissiest
Immediately I think of "smack". Not heroin - gee whiz. Get your mind back on track with the 'smack'.

I thought it apropos to use smack. And I see this as related to the Mozart piece. Separate movements, variations on a theme. Same garter, different motion. I may be reading too much into it, but whatevah. Clevah!

( Posted by: GibsonGirl [Member] On: October 26, 2004 )





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