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A flick of the flint and the small wheel bites
making the spark for yet another light.
Inhaling deeply, he takes another smoke,
itís been five minutes since the last one, bloke.
Twelve smokes an hour, each burned to the filter,
disease taking control, throwing life off kilter.
Denial is the badge worn and proudly displayed.
smoking the most important and obvious choice
made as yet another is consumed, a breath or two is
taken, better hurry though, the cigarettes are waiting.
Into the pocket for the executionerís torch, taking yet
another smoke, precious life-sustaining lungs to scorch..



------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "The Executionerís Torch"
by Char

Bravo Char
Amazing to capture the realness of the deadly actions in sparking up "a" smoke. The light, the inhaling, the scorchings of the lungs...wonderful Char.

Darlene xo

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: October 14, 2004 )

the kd coincidence

a little while ago I was discussing her and Tori Amos, since I couldn't remember Tori, but someone's poetry made me remember. I guess the poetry at Lit is really in touch with the musical world.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 14, 2004 )

smoke rings
Great imagery and good poem throughout. I wonder whether it would be better to put it into rhyming lines though all the way through. From lines 1-7 you have them in rhyming pairs and then from 8 the rhyme is still there but you go into more free-form style. Maybe change it all one way or the other? Apart from that minor structural thingie, it was great. cheers smithy

( Posted by: smithy [Member] On: October 14, 2004 )

Thanks
everyone. I appreciate your reading and commenting.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: October 15, 2004 )

the magic dragon
In my short life as an E.M.T. and earlier as a nurses aide,having witnessed the smothering agony of terminal c.o.p.d.,emphysema and cancer makes me
thankful to God I never took to tobacco.I tried to
look cool,it just never worked for me.In this piece you display a rare talent for objectivity while managing to make it uniquely yours.Impressive!It's just too bad the sides of cigarette boxes aren't big
enough to contain more interesting warnings like this one.The royalties would be awesome!

( Posted by: metrozol [Member] On: October 15, 2004 )

Thanks Metrozol
I appreciate your input. You have been fortunate with your training to know about tobacco hazards. If everyone had such insight, tobacco companies couldn't stay in business. I don't know how they live with themselves. And yes, the subject is uniquely mine, for COPD is the ghost that haunts my house. I don't have it, but I am a helpless observer.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: October 15, 2004 )

well
Char,my words goes like this-----it's quite unfortunate that man exploits some devilish things for economic interest.Like radioactive.Smoke is popularised by federal Govts all over the world,yet 'they'worn that smokers are liable to die young.Imagine.I like your work for telling us some hazard effects on smoking.Cheers !
Princeo

( Posted by: princeo [Member] On: October 18, 2004 )

Thank you Princeo...
So much for reading and commenting. I am more than happy to speak of smoking hazards any time anyone wants to listen. Maybe I can get through to some; maybe not, but I can try.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: October 19, 2004 )





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