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why do i bother trying to get through this life?
nothing ever goes right, it slices through me... like a knife!
the handle is broken, the tip is dulled
the blade is rusty, my life will soon be anulled
there's no need to live such a life anymore
so just turn your heads while i drop to the floor
just forget about me now, i was never here
so go back to sleep, or have another damn beer
forget all the memories all the things i have done
its too late now, your hearts a heavy ton
would this have happened had i given dad that letter?
i guess we'll never know, but our lives are now better!


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<<-Hillary->>


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The following comments are for "just forget me..."
by IamMEdontTRYtoCHANGEit

odd poem this
You talk about a knife, then describe it as broken handled with a rusty blade and a dull tip.
Hope maybe? - You've emasculated the sharp weapon, now a little bit of anger's showing through. Watch the scan in places but otherwise keep it coiming!
Take care
Paul the Ogg

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: October 12, 2004 )

Oh lor
Did I really type 'coiming'? Time for a break when I start doing stuff like that.
Take care
Paul

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: November 10, 2004 )





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