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Morning lives on Dali smiles
Sandalwood lulls day
Wafts of joy stolen in dark.


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Author's Note:
This is a 757, or an inverted haiku (unhaiku)



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The following comments are for "Lancome Poeme"
by Teflon

Tef
Whatever you call this, unhaiku or inverted, doesn't matter-it's still lame. It doesn't paint any kind of picture at all.

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: October 15, 2004 )

Teflon
I just believe you are a very intelligent writer, you do your best to make all your works original and so far you succeed with these unhaiku and inverted haiku things. I won't be surprised if you'll someday write backwards and that we will still be amazed.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: October 15, 2004 )

Kvetch Drink for All
I got to thank Ody, I haven't had a compliment all day. As he said in one of his comments "oy, vey, where I come from, we call it"...where Ody and I come from, we call the compliment OY VEY KVETCHING. :-))

But I don't expect everyone to have enjoyed the undescribable experience of stealing pleasure in the dark. The shade of meaning in the haiku, obviously, is incomprehensible to a person bereft of that knowledge.

It'll be even less comprehensible if I write the way Peter suggests--backwards! What a great idea! A hypervisual haiku! As Betty Davis once said petulantly, "Peetah, Peetah!"

I am sorry, Jessica, for not providing a recipe. I thought better not clutter messages (there could be those that are easily offended by alcohol):

Kosher Lambada

1 part Bacardi 151 Proof Rum
1 part mint Schnapps
1 part Goldschlager cinnamon schnapps (with gold flakes)
1 dash Tabasco Sauce
1 splash Dill Juice

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Glad to be of service!




( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 16, 2004 )

Tef - I'll have a lager
Well done Tef. Lager on tap, if the keg is new; otherwise make it a bottle, no glass.

( Posted by: cjmiller [Member] On: October 16, 2004 )

Bible Haikus! Oy, VodkanIdo...
Whenever I need perps for these haikus I look in the mirror. There's this incorrigible, irreverent guy that draws love letters liek that one Ody sent, and haikus come out just right!

Life, it's just a pathway to a ... a bar full of Zingers, Pink Pillows and Kosher Lambadas!

In the language of Bible, the word haiku can be represented as:
Chai - "life"
Ku(Kaw) - "Line"
Kinda close, ain' it?

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: October 17, 2004 )





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