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It might be dirt
but it`s blood soaked dirt
of someone`s dad
who happened to be in the right place at the wrong time
he stood up and was counted
then felled like a tree
two bullets it took down on his knees
another for luck
you`re out stike three
don`t worry my love you`ll be home soon


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The wise man as he travels through life enjoys the scenery to either side,since he knows he will not come this way again.The road ahead winds back and forth,over the hills and far away,and who knows where it will lead?


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The following comments are for "Not Just Dirt"
by racepool

Shivers, Racepool
I too have been reading in behind and find this one good. I agree with Claire, the 2 dirt's like that seem to take something away.
I got shivers reading this...with that last line a grabber. I am looking forward to reading more of your postings Racepool.

darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: October 12, 2004 )

thank you
Both for your comments....like i said before i like to get it on paper and then finish,I didn`t see a problem with the two dirts at the time.
This poem came about after i had read another poem from a different group and the final line was'a piece of dirt,you realize.Dirt'it was a poem about the Falkland war.I believe.
'Not Just Dirt'was my response....Glad you liked it...
racepool

( Posted by: racepool [Member] On: October 12, 2004 )





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