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Why is it that i hold myself back...
The wind is piercing
Chill cuts through to my heart
I am bewildered -shaken
Thoughts assail me
But the grace to put them down
Passes me by...
The printed word, the symbol-
You have made them, draped them
They are ever so much in your thoughts
Haunting you,wracking your very core
Isn't there anything
More spontaneous
That wells up from depths
Or wafts down from rarer heights





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The following comments are for "Waiting for the Muse"

RJKT, Welcome to! I enjoyed this. Especially,

"Thoughts assail me
But the grace to put them down
Passes me by..."

Great line! Look forward to reading more of you!

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 9, 2004 )

Nae, Claire,Windchime and Teflon
Let me say this: personally I enjoyed reading your comments far more than reading the couple of pieces I've written.Thank you all ever so much.

These were written quite a while ago when i was possibly less jaded and far more exuberant.I'm now at a more 'prosaic' stage trying to come up with 'Short' Stories and little essays.

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: October 10, 2004 )

Penelope ..good point
Thanks very much Penelope.You're quite right, and I'll certainly concede the point .To fall back on a cliche: 'truer words were rarely ever spoken'.

Punctuation-wise therefore: question marks at the end of the very first , and the very last line - interspersed ,as appropriate, by full stops , commas and semicolons.

And to correct a typo that crept in inadvertently- the penultimate line should read: "That wells up from deeper depths'.

Wish I could resubmit factoring in these changes.

( Posted by: RJKT [Member] On: October 11, 2004 )

Waiting for the Muse
Dear RJKT:

As you..... I am as well an apprentice, and we are each doing our best, and I am sure that "fame" shall pass us each by! I certainly wish that "a bit" of fame might come our way but............. who knows. Perhaps we should allow fate to have its way...... easyly said, but certainly a very difficult thing to do! And believe me, I am gratified more than you can ever know by your praise! Thank you again! But let me say that I like your piece (Waiting for the muse) very, very much. It occurs to me that your piece here seems to be saying much the same as my piece entitled Stirrings. However, I do believe that "you have been very deeply moved" in having written that piece. I discussed the process of how "grace from above" seems to occur in my writing as you seem to discuss "the essential pain" no doubt necessarily involved in the unfolding process" of your (as well as my) writing. I think that we have each been "allowed to understand and thus unvail" an important piece of the overall process "of 'true writng' that is, no doubt, always a function of GRACE."



( Posted by: dougsoderstrom [Member] On: January 31, 2005 )

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