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If you`ll be the pilot

I`ll be your Spitfire

We`ll race up to heaven

in a cockpit full of desire

Strap in tight,coz it`s gonna get bumpy

use my joystick for some real rumpy pumpy

We`ll loop the loop

and pull some G`s

We`ll buzz the tower

then back to your place for some Z`s

Once we`ve refuelled

We`ll go up again

come out of the sun

with everything blazing

We`ll buzz the tower one more time

(just coz we`re wild things)

We`ll look into each others eyes

and know we`ve just done something amazing

The wise man as he travels through life enjoys the scenery to either side,since he knows he will not come this way again.The road ahead winds back and forth,over the hills and far away,and who knows where it will lead?

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The following comments are for "I`ll be your Spitfire"
by racepool

I like this. It reminds me of my rebellious self. You captured the spitfire in us all. I didn't really feel the "rumpy pumpy" line, but the "loop the loop" made up for it.

( Posted by: Revelation [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )

Thanks for the comments,I`m glad you enjoyed it...I must agree with you about the rumpy pumpy bit, but that was all i could come up with at the time.thanks again....Peace...racepool

( Posted by: racepool [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

That's funny!
That's so funny;D I mentioned that because your well written poem helped me slide effectively in your shoes, and I could feel myself writing "rumpy pumpy" for the tone of it, then deciding against it.

Are you a "NoAvatar" by choice, or because you can't figure out how to do it?

( Posted by: Revelation [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

hi there,glad you could see the predicament..i was in....mind you what else rhymes so well with bumpy and means 'I love you,and lets do the wild thing'?
As for the Noavatar malaarkey,you`re spot on again,I have no idea how to do it....haha.
Keep writing you`re really good...

( Posted by: racepool [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

The NoAvatar Club
Grazie. We should start a "NoAvatar" club.

( Posted by: Revelation [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

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