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(Tanka)

she hits his wallet
spending money like water
using credit cards
he now understands the phrase
what goes around comes around

------
Kacee Huggs


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The following comments are for "His New Wife"
by Nitz Kitty

His New Wife
Nitz Kitty, I know the situation is not funny, but the way you presented it made me laugh. What goes around does come around. Very good!

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )

New Wife
It is funny ...but he's not the one laughing
When my ex first left me for another woman...I wanted to get revenge...but something inside just said ,"Wait and Watch." I did and it took awhile but it started happening...and look who's crying now...thanks for the comment

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )

New Wife
You packed a lot of meaning into five lines, a total of 21 words. At first it completely went over my head but after reading it a second time it's like...wow. The meaning just pops right out and well...I hope that woman buys everything.

( Posted by: Concept [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )

New Wife
I'm glad you got it...and liked it...and oh boy, does she ever

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )

New Wife
Kacee;
You packed a powerful punch here...I enjoyed the read....This is a awesome read...

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

Jeannie
Thanks for the rating and comment...my girlfriend from Florida wrote me an email and sparked this one

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

Nice
The poem is nice,but Iam afraid if that is Haiku.Well done.

( Posted by: princeo [Member] On: October 25, 2004 )

Princeo
Thank you for your comment...it is listed under Haiku but is a Tanka which is 5-7-5-7-7

( Posted by: Nitz Kitty [Member] On: October 25, 2004 )





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