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This is what I like to call a tri-ku,three haikus,of a memory about a sequence of events that
never happened,but would've been nice had they occurred. Musings of one inhabited by tiny creatures of fantasy,if you will. Hence the title.

memories in an old car

A mutt wakes me up
licks the ice cream off my hand
the dusk approaches.

Crickets in the mist
the lamplight flickers.My friends,
Let's play some music!

Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.

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The following comments are for "posessed by pixies"
by metrozol

Tri-ku...ha, i love it. I think you did an awesome job. I like the dog licking the icecream off the hand because I had a dog that would do that, as well as off faces! Crickets in the mist, i can just imagine that line. Infact, i can imagine all that you've written.

( Posted by: Concept [Member] On: October 5, 2004 )

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