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If I could bring you home
for just one more day
I would kiss your sweet face
and beg you to stay.

So suddenly, time ran out
and you had to leave,
if I live to be one hundred
I will always grieve.

I wanted more time with you
to thank you for all you had done
and to tell you when you leave
my heart would be gone.

Oh, to see you once again
and share an afternoon,
each year you are gone
just breaks my heart in to.

I wonder if we’ll meet again
on some celestial shore
to catch up on all the years,
to see you smile, once more.

Do you know how much I miss you?
And that I think of you each day?
Do you know you are a part of me
in all I do and say?

In dreams I have seen you
but so quickly you are gone,
I wake to find emptiness
where only you belong.

Rest now and know I love you,
your presence I will always lack,
God knows if he should loan you
I would never give you back.


------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "My Marie"
by Char

Marie.....Char
Char,

A lovely tribute bringing together a lot that we feel every day. Your verse:

In dreams I have seen you
but so quickly you are gone,
I wake to find emptiness
where only you belong.

If you have read my poetry you will know that I beleive that in dreams we are allowed across the viel for a while, and there is always sadness on parting again, but we are stronger for the memory.

Jade also wrote a poem on grief that I found gave deep meaning to your words:

So suddenly, time ran out
and you had to leave,
if I live to be one hundred
I will always grieve.

Your lines:

Do you know you are a part of me
in all I do and say?

Sums up this tribute for me and is the basis of my deep beliefs, people really do become 'as one' with our souls, so how can we ever be truly alone?

Thank you for sharing,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: October 6, 2004 )

Thank You
I appreciate your reading and commenting on this piece Ivor, Claire, and Windchime. Marie, my paternal grandmother, who raised me, has been gone for twenty-five years and still I grieve as though it happened recently. Yes, we do become as one. As long as I breathe, she will live.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: October 8, 2004 )

Char's Marie
Beautiful tribute to your wonderful Marie Char. I cried each time I read this, the big sap I am. How wonderful that you never took having a loving grandmother for granted. How proud she would be too Char. You have many of her strong points.

Lovely piece.

My best to you,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: October 8, 2004 )

Baby don't cry
I won't tell how I felt the time I read your poem,but would tell you that death is inevitable,a better place to be.Adieu.Who ever.
Thanks for your comments on my works.
Princeo

( Posted by: princeo [Member] On: October 9, 2004 )

Thank You
so very much Dar, and Princeo. I value your opinions and your time. We all experience loss and perhaps grow stronger for it. I often feel I don't want to be THAT strong though.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: October 13, 2004 )

My Marie
Oh Char, you have me in tears. What a beautiful poem. So sorry for this loss. I guess we keep them alive forever in our hearts. Hugs ~

The ending was incredible, and you are right:

"God knows if he should loan you
I would never give you back."

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: October 13, 2004 )

Aww
Thanks so much Nae. Yes, we keep them with us I believe. In our hearts. Thanks so much for commenting.

Always,
Char

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: October 19, 2004 )





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