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I Look at Thee

I look at thee with the greatest- admiration.
I look at thou to brighten my day,
To arouse a spirit within my craven, Dying candle.
Yet when Our eyes so souly meet,
Your face grows monger with disgust.
I wonder why and often ponder,
What it feels like to be dead,
To not have emotion and not thee.
Life in death is much more peaceful,
Having angels smile at me.
I also wonder what it feels like,
To have your heart alongside mine,
To share a beauty with the world.
This I wonder when I look,
When I look at you forever.


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The following comments are for "I Look at Thee"
by Mr. E

to Mr. E
Consistency of thee and thou and you and your can definitely be improved.

"so souly meet"? Are you sure there is such a word? Did you mean soulfullly?

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: April 21, 2002 )

Thee & Thou?
I agree with Furious here that You've not really gotten your use of Thee and Thou correct. I get the feeling you've used them just to sound grandiose.

To clarify their usage: 'Thee' is used in the objective case, while 'Thou' is used in the subjective. It's the same difference as 'Me' and 'I'

Sorry to sound negative. :-(

To get back to the rest of the peice for a moment, it's certainly not bad. A little morbid, perhaps, but not bad if you like that sort of thing.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: December 5, 2002 )





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