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old pictures of people leaving a boat.
a child closes an eye and tries
to see half of what is.
breath on the window. no. gone.
a hammer upon a nail. no. rusted.
a warning shout disappearing in the air.
footsteps in the sand. one foot
close to another. a red light
in a deserted street. can you
see a plant grow?
everything is in frames. we love
and remember some.

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The following comments are for "black/white"
by Ingi

I got sad when reading this poem. Like when you have a look at your old photo albums, and realize that time will never come back. I think your words are inspiring. Thanks.

( Posted by: MrZebra [Member] On: September 29, 2004 )

"can you see a plant grow?"
I'm spinning around your poems for a while. There are not many posts on so deep as your poems are. And most of all I like the form you found for the ideas. After all not only the idea does matter, isn't it?!

( Posted by: inmost [Member] On: September 30, 2004 )

The theme is from feelings after looking at an old picture. The form is inspired by several different things I`ve listened to and read, it isnt really fresh, but just feels natural. I like more to write scenes than classic poetry.

Thanks for the kind words and feedback.

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: September 30, 2004 )

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