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Hidden deep within the sands of nine
I await that last fateful day
to summon forth that foe of mine
and through my strength, cast him away

Fate uncertain and for fate to decide
I prepare my soul for the struggle ahead
I take on the mantle of my father who died
I pledge to fight until I'm dead

Blood and sweat are my rewards
the blade in my hand contains my soul
these shackles upon me, release their hold
causing my fury, to take over me whole

My blade thirsts for death, and for death alone
for blood to flow from the flesh of my foe
his spear and my sword will cut to the bone
the blood choked sands will beg us to go

Hidden deep within the sands of nine
I await that last fatefull day
to summon forth that foe of mine
and through my strength, cast him away

-Chill
(If it is difficult learn it, if it is easy teach it).


------
Dreams that disturbe you when you sleep,
and haunt you when you are awake.
Make up a mirror of who and what you are,
spiritually.


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The following comments are for "The Eternal Warrior."
by chill

to chill
Really nice graphic poem with. Sands of nine? Creation/destruction? I like it except for "I pledge to fight until I'm dead", seems slightly childish compared to the others. It sounds like a scene from a great ancient story. Sometimes though, the rhythm sounds erratic. Change that and everything is fine, complete.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: April 20, 2002 )





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